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[ketch_me]

pounding
my brain
with a hammer punchingmy stomachwith a fist touchingmy wastewith a palm taping my eyes shutturning the music upscreamingwith no sound hopelessly hopingfor deathno noonly torture endures footstepsapproaching a blank stare then it's over my wish came true

Comments

[sneere]

"touchingmy wastewith a palm"

dude, ddi you just mention oo in your poem? thats awsome! lol! nice poem.