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0penhearts

Fic: Chances (4/ )

Jun 08, 2010 22:27

title: Chances (4 ( Read more... )

pairing: rachel/will, fic, series: chances, tv: the rachel and will show, recs

Comments 16

kitsune13 June 9 2010, 05:45:51 UTC

I am absolutely loving the way this is going. This section, where they kiss and he pulls back, feels so real and honest, I can't even. I am in love with the fact that you had him say he couldn't do this yet, and the overlay of his memory of her with her as she is now was wonderful. I AM SO HAPPY, I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE REST! ♥

0penhearts June 9 2010, 06:03:44 UTC

You will be SHOCKED to learn that in the first draft basically all of his "I can't do this" dialogue took place in the midst of lots of making out :)

I'm so glad you're loving it! More on the way soon :)

infinityonhigh2 June 9 2010, 12:39:24 UTC

I love the progression of this story. The kiss was just how it should have been full of lust and a mixture of confusion. I can't wait for more of this amazing fic :)

0penhearts June 9 2010, 18:12:48 UTC

Thank you! Progression was a big deal for me in this one, so I'm glad that's coming through :)

Fic: Chances (4/ ) wistfulwatcher June 9 2010, 16:35:45 UTC

This is exactly what I needed in life. I love this so much, please update soon! All of the voices are right on, and I love the relationships between the three. You manage to hit the nail on the head with just a few words. Spectacular. More please!

Fic: Chances (4/ ) wistfulwatcher June 9 2010, 16:38:00 UTC

Also, the hug?! So great. I also really liked Will helping her turn off the intercom. Brad Falchuk must be a Ruester shipper :)

Re: Fic: Chances (4/ ) 0penhearts June 9 2010, 18:14:07 UTC

Well good! :) I love Finn, and I wanted to see him actually get to do something in a W/R fic instead of being conveniently forgotten lol. There will be more soon!

romantic_india June 9 2010, 21:37:57 UTC

...he was twenty nine when he’d started Glee, and she was sixteen then.

I just have to say, this? Sooooo hot.

So, I agree with everybody. The characterization, the writing, the plot, the tension is all spot on. I would've liked to read about their, ahem, date, but this still reads flawlessly. I can't wait to read more. :)

0penhearts June 9 2010, 22:13:37 UTC

Lol, I may or may not have a predilection with pairings that happen to have significant age differences. Ahem. But I was good this time and waiting until she was legal for the making out to start! *pats self on the back*

would've liked to read about their, ahem, date
Ohhhh, them on a date. It's so weird to try to write, since they're so . . . them, y'know? But I'm stil having tons of fun with this, and I'm glad you're liking it too :)

Hot Quinn icon is OT and hot.

joshdonnalyman June 10 2010, 03:27:50 UTC

I adore this chapter and the story as a whole. I love that Will wants to take this new relationship slowly; it doesn't feel right that he would rush into it. It would have to be difficult to reconcile student-Rachel with woman-Rachel, as you beautifully wrote. Looking forward to the next chapter!

0penhearts June 10 2010, 04:47:02 UTC

Thank you so much! As I mentioned to kitsune13 up there, this chapter originally had a lot more making out, lol. But I'm happy with the final product. I'm glad you're enjoying it!