fic: Trying Again for cissasghost

[mynuet]

cissasghost commissioned me to write V/Hr for the_fund, and I thought I'd post it over here as well. It turned out a bit on the angsty side, but hopefully that will be all right. And there's mention of Ron/Hermione, just so y'all know.

Comments

[cissasghost]

Wow - you wrote angst! I like it. It's very in-character for both of them, and very real. I know how tricky writing Viktor speaking in English can be, and you did it well. He sounds like he's tripping over the language, not like he's an idiot (so many fic authors make him an idiot - sigh).

And - the awful pink dress. Tee hee. ;)

Thank you!

-Sonya

[mynuet]

Yeah, I was all wibbly about whether it was too angsty, so I'm relieved to know you like it. I'd had the general idea for a long time, so it was good to sit down and write it. :)

It's wonderful

[staciey]

And doubling up on the "in character" comment. I've always felt much the same way about Ron/Hermione. I mean, you know they care about one another, but I also get the feeling they would go completely toxic if they actually tried to have a real, lasting romantic relationship. I could just see the two of them mentally and emotionally wearing each other down if they tried to be together.

I also loved the not so veiled stab at THE PINK DRESS, and the fact that you acknowledged Hermione's bossy side. That's one of the reasons why I think Viktor and Hermione would work so well. I don't think he would be fazed by her bossy side at all, and wouldn't feel threatened by her being Miss Super High Standards, because he kind of seems like Mister Super High Standards. They both have that type A personality thing going on.

And additional compliments on the deft handling of Viktor's English. The people who make him out to be a twit as opposed to someone who took up English as something other than a native language make me go "grrr".

Re: It's wonderful

[mynuet]

Thank you! :D I couldn't resist the stab at the dress - when did Hermione start raiding Pansy Parkinson's closet? But, it's just a movie, and at least they chose an utter babe to play Viktor. Or at least so I keep reminding myself.

[__sirius__]

Hello! Waves I've been lurking around for a bit now and just had to comment. I really enjoyed this story! It didn't make me cringe like all the other ones I have read on other sites. Viktor and Hermione seemed very real. Cissasghost made a great point when they said Viktor sounded like he was tripping over the language, not like a stammering idiot, which is a relief.

Anyway, well done and hope to see more soon!

Cheers,
Sirius

[mynuet]

Thank you! :D I did my best, and I'm pretty happy how it turned out. It's not all fluffy bunnies, but that's all to the better, right?

[cassandramalfoy]

*Sniff*
GO Hr/V!!!!!!!

[mynuet]

Yes! :D

[cassandramalfoy]

*CHEERS*

:)

[ecaps]

Ladela, nice fic.
I don't really post too often, but I must say that the fact that someone actually took the time to think about things from Victor's perspective and to realize that indeed foreigners are not prone to ALWAYS using short words and simple sentances did make me smile. As a matter of fact it is rather probable that Victor would know the word "ultimatum" since it is the same in Bulgarian. It is less likely that he'll know the word "card" since it is not.

To refrain from making this a long and tedious monologue, I once again, as a Bulgarian who has had to learn English as a second language, offer my compliments and take my leave.

Re: :)

[mynuet]

Oh, neat! I had no idea about the ultimatum thing, but it's nifty that it's the same word. My first language is Spanish, and as I was learning to speak English, I often had a more formal vocabulary than the native speakers, so I thought that was likely to be universal; the language that you learn tends to be more formal than the language that you speak, if that makes any sense.

Anyway, I'll stop rambling, but thank you so much - it means a lot to know that I didn't make him sound hideously unlike what he should. :)