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15lbpurebunny

Particles of Light, Chapter 17: People Are Like Suns

Aug 30, 2008 12:29

Title: Chapter 17 - People Are Like Suns
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: I don't own anything, and I mean no harm. I also don't own the title, which is a Neil Finn song.
Spoilers: As always, potential light spoilers from Season One

( Chapter 17 Here! )

fic, life, dani reese, charlie crews

Comments 7

Commentary part deux speakfire August 30 2008, 20:28:38 UTC

Another great chapter. I really like the sun biography analogy comparison that Charlie uses. However I'm not sure he should go comparing Dani to a flaming ball of gas and hot air out loud. I'm just saying.

Also you did such a great job of verbally relaying the tumult of emotions Dani was experiencing during her panic attack. Her feelings are so vividly described, they're palpatable (is that how you spell it?)

Re: Commentary part deux 15lbpurebunny August 30 2008, 21:19:14 UTC

Thanks for re-posting your comment. That other entry was shambolic.

Ooh, I'm glad you liked the sun and star analogy. I agree, calling her gassy and hot is probably a death sentence for our boy. Hahahahha.

And, thanks for the commments about the panic attack. Poor Dani.

Re: Commentary part deux citosol September 2 2008, 19:15:38 UTC

You did a Life icon!!!!!!
^__________^

grimorie August 30 2008, 22:46:45 UTC

Hurrah for updates! I love your description of Dani's dark night, her fall into temptation. I wanted to block her along the way or have Charlie suddenly arrive. Mostly, I wanted to say: 'Oh, honey, no.'

Then straight to Charlie and despite being in two different locations it felt like a continuance of what Dani was going through. I agree with speakfire, he shouldn't say that analogy aloud to Dani. There'd be imminent pain in the future if he does.

Once again, wonderful update!

15lbpurebunny August 30 2008, 23:15:03 UTC

Yaaaay! I actually tried to thank you in the A/N for helping me, but I was having such a horrible time trying to post this thing. The cut wasn't working, then it was all garbled and I couldn't get your name to stay in there, so I gave up.

BUT, thank you so much!

Poor Dani, she's tough though, she'll be okay.

Not okay? Charlie if he calls her gassy, for sure.

citosol September 2 2008, 19:13:45 UTC

Oh, I love (naked) Charlie swimming in his pool while thinking about Dani...^_____^

(oh yes, my bad english, my CC obsession (and me^^) are back!-the tanned version, of course!-)

15lbpurebunny September 2 2008, 19:28:16 UTC

Ha! Welcome back tanned citosol!

Yes, CC in his pool is a nice, nice image.