Particles of Light, Chapter Four: Open Doors and Bare Feet

[15lbpurebunny]

 Title: Chapter Four - Open Doors and Bare Feet
 Rating: PG, for language if you're sensitive
 Disclaimer: Not mine. Not mine. And, of course, not mine.

Comments

[grimorie]

I like that things were just a little bit awkward in the party because they're not really friends yet and it would be that kind of awkward and I like Reese thinking about what usually constitutes a good time for her is also awkward. A lot more awkward, really.

I suspect that if Reese were asked, honestly, what she considers a real good time, it'd probably be dangerous and illegal.

And Ted's there! I always love Ted and Reese interacting. Poor Charlie only Ted and Reese there to celebrate his birthday with.

[15lbpurebunny]

I definitely wanted it to be awkward, but no as awkward as if we were still in the first season's time frame. I wanted Dani to be gravitating towards Charlie a bit more.

I love Ted, too (and, as you know, I think you captured him PERFECTLY in your fic!)

Yes, I felt sorry for Charlie only having two friends there with him. I guess I was the one who could have done something about that, but....LOL

I purposely didn't "invite" Bobby to the party since I figured two things:

1) I had it in my mind that Charlie felt some kind of breakthrough with Dani in the car and he wouldn't want the mood of the night to piss her off, and Bobby would certainly piss her off and

2) I didn't ever feel in the mood to write Bobby, for some reason. Go figure!

[grimorie]

Oh, I think they'd be a little bit closer to each other after the first season (with Dani, of course, protesting at every step of the way).

Charlie and his two friends btw, I forgot to respond to Dani having little to no friends and I tend to agree with you that even before the whole drug thing happened Dani didn't make friends easy, while I can imagine Charlie being the opposite. Can you imagine the horror he must have felt, for a guy who seems so naturally friendly to be trapped in prison and then solitary?

Oh, yeah, Bobby boy would really piss her off and the whole evening would be ruined.

I love the idea of Charlie, Dani and Ted forming some kind of unlikely family and from here I think they're on their way there.

[15lbpurebunny]

I think you are totally right about Charlie being this friendly, happy guy before going to jail. I can see him having a ton of friends and a crazy social life

Be Still My Heart

[britphile7]

*shivers* You make it so easy to slip into Dani's persona and feel all that lovely, awkward, I'm-attracted-but-fightin'-it tension between Dani and Charlie.

I enjoyed how you use the large open space of his house and backyard (as opposed to the tight confines of their car and office) to set up Dani and Charlie being able to finally relax with each other.

Charlie silently smiled and pulled off one piece of fruit, put it back in the otherwise empty bag and handed it to Reese. “Here, you should try one, too. You might not like it. It might be too weird. But, you should try it…...”

Nice double entendre. Can't wait to see if, when, and how she tries "it".

Lovely chapter - and lovely, meaning-laden gift from Dani..

Re: Be Still My Heart

[15lbpurebunny]

Brit, I'm so glad you got the double entendre. I almost drove myself mad trying to put one in that chapter that didn't sound smarmy or sexual. I don't think Charlie would ever do that.

My intention was that he would say something so vague that it could be construed as being about anything. I think, in this chapter, they are interested in each other and how the other person thinks about stuff. Dani is starting to care for Charlie, but neither one really is aware of how deep the attraction between them (sexual or otherwise)runs.

[omnie]

This got a bit longer than I intended, but I just, I love this story SO MUCH. I get excited every time I see you've posted a new chapter.

As her thoughts turned back to Crews and his time in jail, she felt a tightness spread across her jaw line. She thought about how hard it must be for him to adjust. Fuck. To adjust? No, to have survived. To live through hell on earth -or worse- and to come out on the other side, alive.You know, I wonder how much Dani really thinks about Crews and his history. From canon, it's very hard to know what her internal monologue is like. I mean, she almost never speaks without control. I tend to have the sense that each word she says is being filtered very thoroughly, precisely to keep other people away from her thoughts

[15lbpurebunny]

Thanks so much for your great comments. I really enjoyed reading this, Omnie

[omnie]

I feel she's fairly transparent, in some ways, though.

Yeah, I don't think I have much of a feel for Reese and what goes on in her head (unlike with Charlie, who's utterly my POV character), so it's been interesting trying to figure her out.

Yay, next chapter! *goes to read*

[15lbpurebunny]

Uh, oh. If Charlie is your POV character, then you might not like chapter 5.

*furtively glances around and nervously wrings hand in anticipation*

[citosol]

...uh here it is!!!!
I haven't read it yet,I'll read it this evening when I go home from work, but I feel happy in anticipation....
by now THANKS!
^_^
...
...I can't wait...

[15lbpurebunny]

Thanks so much, Citosol! Really hope you like it.

I'm afraid I've left you hanging again, though. Hope you forgive me!

speachless

[citosol]

Perfect.

I like the double entendre too. I really think Charlie would do that just in the way you described.
I like the irony (i.e.:“I like going barefoot. Its nice to go barefoot anywhere ya want and not get staph.”), and I had to google "candelnut" 'cause I didn't find it on my dictionary (I still burn it! ;P) and then I find out that there isn't any italian word to difine it! ...now I have to buy a new dictionary...^___^

don't worry I forgive you, I like so much this story! (..even if I still hope that the two of them sooner or later....aehm!...#^_^#)

Re: speachless

[15lbpurebunny]

Oh, I hear you....each chapter I fight between getting them together and keeping them apart for a bit longer. Like you said, tension is a good thing.

Candlenuts are tropical green fruit that would be hard to find. They are also sometimes called Indian walnuts. But, they are very leafy and green with hard outer shells.

I wanted to use something really weird. Just. Like. Charlie.

LOL!

PS Chapter 5 is up, so check it out.

[pbeeslysweater]

Mmmmm, lovely. As always.

Though I'm still not sold on the whole Charlie/Dani thing (I know, I know, what kind of a fan am I?!), this does help make it a little more realistic for me.

Oh, and your descriptions of Charlie's outfit...*swoons*

I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes!

[15lbpurebunny]

Well, truthfully, I'm kind of a contradiction in terms when it comes to shipping Charlie and Dani....because, I really don't ship them in the show, just in fic.

How weird is that? I know, werid.

Glad you are enjoying. You are tearing through these, girl! I LOVE IT!