First of all, I was really happy to see that somebody is writing Müllstuber! There is not enough love for these two by far!
I must say, though, that I did notice some mistakes in spelling and punctuation. A beta would surely be able to help you with that.
I'm very curious to see how you're going to develop this idea. It is intriguing to get a look at professional club football from an outsider's point of view. However, I doubt that it would be as easy as Ariel makes Thomas believe. You don't get into professional football as easy as that - and even if her friend could place him in an amateur team somewhere, it would take him years to actually become so good and be noticed enough to get a chance at Bayern. Are you planning to write your story over a period of several years? I can't see it happening any other way - and even like that, it would have to be very well-written to be plausible.
I'm very curious to see how you're going to shape that idea into a fic!
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I must say, though, that I did notice some mistakes in spelling and punctuation. A beta would surely be able to help you with that.
I'm very curious to see how you're going to develop this idea. It is intriguing to get a look at professional club football from an outsider's point of view. However, I doubt that it would be as easy as Ariel makes Thomas believe. You don't get into professional football as easy as that - and even if her friend could place him in an amateur team somewhere, it would take him years to actually become so good and be noticed enough to get a chance at Bayern. Are you planning to write your story over a period of several years? I can't see it happening any other way - and even like that, it would have to be very well-written to be plausible.
I'm very curious to see how you're going to shape that idea into a fic!
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