Comments | 1on31y24: Arabian Nights Chapter 4 (mock)

1on31y24

Arabian Nights Chapter 4 (mock)

Jun 23, 2009 06:04

Ok guys...after searching and literally tearing my room apart I have found my notes at last (cries tears of joy), so for the time being to keep you guys happy I am going to post a little glimpse of what is to come in chapter 4. I am sorry that it is so short. Hopefully once I write the actual chapter then it will be much much better. So without ( Read more... )

arabian nights

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lifescape8 June 23 2009, 11:02:21 UTC

lol, congrat for finding the note! that was a really sweet preview. I can't wait to read the update.

1on31y24 June 23 2009, 18:57:53 UTC

Can you wait for another week??

lifescape8 June 24 2009, 07:40:20 UTC

Sure I can. I am not trying to put any pressure on you sweetheart. I know you have a life and you must be busy so you update when is the most convient for you. (^_^)

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safa56bmc June 23 2009, 11:30:23 UTC

continue this fic sweety.im already on hooks here....but remember happy endings..or else im haunting u for ever..

1on31y24 June 23 2009, 18:58:59 UTC

*shivers* yes m'am this one here has a happy ending. Most of my stories do actually. And I'm glad you're hooked safa san, makes me happy to hear that.

safa56bmc June 23 2009, 19:11:02 UTC

heheheheheheh......

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list_33 June 23 2009, 15:26:44 UTC

I didn't know this story but I'm happy to have found it !
I hope reading more soon...

1on31y24 June 23 2009, 18:57:17 UTC

Lol isn't that usually how great stories are found? ^_~ I'm joking. Thank you very much for liking this story, although I don't particularly like this chapter. I just wrote it to give people an idea on what is going to happen in the actual one so that they can wait patiently. If there is anything wrong don't hesitate to tell me ok? And once again thank you so very much...^___^

5123 June 23 2009, 15:39:18 UTC

love it! want more!! want more!!^_^ great job

darkhime88 June 23 2009, 15:58:36 UTC

A little sad that this isn't the real chapter 4 ^^. However, if you don't mind, I'll give you some comments. Everything goes smoothly on its way except Asami's expression. I think he's the type of person who never says he's in love even though he's been already. So the 2 sentences "Now even if I have to face a thousand armies I can die in peace" -> shouts a little like an emotional man in love and "why don't you tell me what other ways may I address the keeper of my heart?" -> he never says something this sweet and open like this. Therefore, (just my opinion), in the real chapter you should make him cold as usual and speaks as less and selective words as possible (he speaks a little too much ( ... )