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21enemies

i will wait for you

Sep 14, 2015 23:16

Title: Brutal Love [20]
Author: Molly
Pairing: Billie/Mike
Summary: "Mom, it's Billie, you here?"
Previous parts: located here
Note: Long chapter ahead! This one got away from me.

( Billie Joe coasted down the familiar streets of Rodeo, California that he'd had memorized for years. )

story: brutal love, fandom: green day, pairing: billie/mike

Comments 2

strychninetwist September 15 2015, 17:21:17 UTC

I liked the start of this chapter with the look into the physical effects on Billie, and then the later look into Ollie's thoughts and feelings on the matter as well as Billie's. I think it's sweet how the photographs remind Billie of their youth - and the transition into such an important memory, no matter how dirty, was great. The memory is written well too, and I can imagine two teenage friends being like that for their first time.

As for your last reply - we all get a little creative freedom every now and then ;)

21enemies September 18 2015, 02:21:59 UTC

The "first time" scene was definitely generic and cliché, but it felt important to include in the story--I'm glad you liked it! Honestly, it was probably one of my favorite scenes so far into the story.

Thank you, as always, for your feedback and for reading! And you are a hundred percent right; this is my story, and I'll make it work however I want. ;) Best to you!