wow, that was amazing! Great imagery... it got confusing at some points because it was hard to tell which man you were talking bout... otherwise it was good.
dude. this is awsome, its reminiscent of a scene from one of the good 1950s mob movies. i love how you set up the plot and begin to wind down to the club. and pintstripe jays!! yeah man!! the sensory images that i get from the description of the club are great, you can see the smoke in the air, and the dimmed lights, and the ladies and prostitutes with big dresses...god, i love it!! keep it up man, these are some of the best stuff im reading.
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chris
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other than that its wonderful, as usual. Just..long over due! ^______^;;;
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