Letter to Sarah

[30rocker]

I am trying to write a letter to Sarah for the Make Sarah Smile project, but for some reason it just doesn't seem right. I was wondering if anyone had time to read over my letter (its less than one page) and tell me what you think. I would really, really appreciate it!
Thanks
Rene

Heres the letter:

(Short intro before this)

I remember being in my

Comments

[iheartbillyb]

I think thats good, better then mine lol. i have to work on it. but i went to an all girls high school so i know where you are coming from.

[30rocker]

Thanks so much!

[30rocker]

Thanks! And I'm sure your letter is great.

[bigsocks10]

That's excellent. Very impressive, it says what needs to be said without being gushy (you weren't going for gushy, were you?). I like it.

[30rocker]

No, I wasn't going for gushy. Thanks so much for reading!

[iwantachrysler]

The second to last sentence "that it possible to have" is the only mistake- the "it's." But I think that was probably a careless mistake that you would have caught... I don't know if I am overly sentimental, but this letter almost made me cry- not because it's overly sentimental though (it's perfect). It was so amazing! I think she's going to love it and I am so happy that I got to read it. It really kicks my letter's ass. Awesome JOB!

[30rocker]

Thanks so much!
Yeah, I hadn't edited it before I posted this, but thanks for catching that.
And I don't think you're overly sentimental- it made me sad to write this.
Also, I was wondering how I should format this letter. Business format, maybe? But that seems too formal.
Thanks for the review, I really appreciate it!
Thanks,
Rene

[30rocker]

Thanks for all the comments! I'm so glad you guys like it. But I was also wondering how I should format this letter...business format maybe...it's going to be going in with a group of other letters that are all going ot be sent to Gov. Palin. So I really don't know how to format this letter.

Thanks!