Relationship in 5 (Fifty Word Stories)

[schizocarebear]

WHO?
“Don’t worry, you’ll find somebody else.”
“Who says I’m worried?”
“Your face says it.”
“I’m not worried.”
“You are. You’re worried you’ll be alone forever, everyone is when a relationship ends.”
“I’m the one who ended it.”
“So?”
“Why would I worry?”
“Just…don’t. Someone will come.”
“…You’re sure?”
“Positive.”
“Who?”

WHERE?
“Let’s

Comments

[jimbo0941]

This was a really interesting idea. I like it. It's kind of odd to me that it's all dialogue, but it's also fitting because from an outside perspective that's all there is and yet that's not all there is at all. I like these as a whole. A bunch of different relationships and yet for all I know these snippets of conversation could all be between the same two people. Like I said, it was really interesting to me.

[schizocarebear]

I actually wrote it to be something, like, a relationship budding, in bloom, dying, and then possibly starting over again. I'm not sure. However, they could very well be different couples at different stages.

I'm glad you liked it and left feedback; so few people do so these days.

[shesangitreal]

I think this is brilliant char, your use of pure dialog makes this very interesting, and because that creates some sort of outside perspective, you can easily relate to it, even if you haven't been in a relationship i think.

I liked the pauses, and Ums and all that stuff, it makes it real.

[schizocarebear]

I'm pretty proud with how it turned out, actually.

It all started with 'WHY?' written in my school planner during Spanish class and then 'WHO?' appeared and soon I decided just to do them all (who, what, when, where, and why - screw how!).

I really need to start writing again, I mean, stuff that doesn't suck.