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[5thofnovember]

TITLE: Seven Deadly Sins
PAIRING: Jack/Elizabeth
RATING: R
SUMMARY: For a long time I'd had the idea to write a series of short J/E drabbles, like a series, each one themed with a different one of the seven deadly sins. So um, that's what this is, parts 1, 2 & 3, which are "lust", "gluttony", and "sloth", and I've used gluttony here in the original

Comments

[anyofmanynames]

Oh, I like it. The gluttony section is particulary nice in the way it really it really embodies excess -- an excess of layers and meaning, excesses of substances, and an excess of tones in the piece itself -- beautiful, sordid, desperate, hopeless - which is just the perfect ending note as it captures that unfortunate irony in which the indulgence of gluttony cannot bring satifaction. Wow, that was a horrifically excessive sentence, if it even hung together as a sentence at all.

Also loved:
Jack thought, perhaps, he drank too much.
But, that was a silly thought, brought on, probably, by drinking too much.

I look forward to the rest. Pride, I'd think, could be especially interesting as it seems to be Jack's greatest sin, greatest act, and greatest resource all in one. All his confidence and resilience in the face of adversity come from that simple conviction that he's Captain Jack Sparrow, mate.

[5thofnovember]

I'd really wanted to do something with the, ah, substance, nature of excess, the existence of marijuana within their world was the think that I realized first, and then the opium, and I... guess I just finally had an excuse to write it. If anyone would know about such things, I told myself, a pirate would, and Sparrabeth, to me, is very much about liberation. See: what other people would call "corruption". :]

Glad you liked it!

[sawasdeekha]

Wow! I don't have the words to describe why or how much I loved this, so I'm not going to try! ;o)

I also think 'Pride' will be very interesting, and also 'Envy' - depending on the protagonist.

Definitely looking forward to reading the rest!

[5thofnovember]

Ohhhh, I think I know who/what I'm doing for envy. XD That, in fact, will probably be the most fun to write.

[piratemistress]

Love it! Do continue! I actually liked the first section the best. Though the opium was a nice touch.

[5thofnovember]

In my humble opinion, opium is always a nice touch, :]

Thanks for the feedback, I'm planning on continuing as soon as I get a random spark of....something.

Beautiful!

[artemis_issoria]

I especially enjoyed: "Still, his hands were not rough enough; his beard, too fine. She craved the matted tangle snaking through her fingers, the coolness of beads brushing her cheek, the serenade of clinking coins, playing a song of bonfires, and sunsets in her ear."

This is such an original idea, I loved reading. I can't wait for more.

Re: Beautiful!

[5thofnovember]

I blame the Flogging Molly song for the idea, but I think I've gone in quite a different direction. Thank you, thank you, and thank you. ♥

[writing_samsara]

This was really, truly gorgeous, and i am so excited for the next installment. Brillaint - I read it twice just to try and linger in this world a bit.

"Lust" is poignant - hot and horrible and a telling portrait of Will and Lizzie, of the complexity of their marriage and relationship. I completely felt it in my bones: that desperation that Will's hands cannot be rough enough, that he cannot be Jack - and the horrible necessity of having to substitute one man for another during sex, but to be stifled, unable to ever truly release. Sigh.

And "Gluttony" - good Lord. The richness of their interaction - the complexity, the heartbreak, the excess. Again, brilliant. I am without words.

And "Sloth" - hee hee. Giggled at that one, at the perfectly portrayed circular reasoning of Captain Jack. ;)

You're very talented, and I am soooo anxious for the next. :)

*squishes*

[5thofnovember]

Heh, I believe we spoke a bit about my muses before, yeah? Anyhow, glad you liked it, I promise I'll try to actually remember I've got a work-in-progress and ... you know ... finish.