It's odd because you dont look like your an idiot, and yet you are. But you do look like a poser. Seriously why dont you learn to spell. And write better poems.
Her picture makes her look like a cool cat that is actually worth talking to..but her lj..holy fucking shit, man. 1/16 of my brain cells committed suicide.
Man, that poem is so deep. I mean, you wrote about how you killed yourself in the poem. Could you tell why you committed suicide in your poem? I didn't catch that bit.
yes well it may be a "ghud" poem as such, but most unfortunately it is all to easy to "get" ;the meaning is obvious, the dialogue blatant and the use of the rather poor and cliched (note only one) metaphor is all to mediocre and rather over-used by todays budding suicidal/homicidal terrible teenage poets. Much to my disatisfaction the actual verse rather than giving life to the intended meaning ruins it whilst not entirely destroying the meaning ruins the possible ambiguous nature the whole piece could of have. Rather like making something that once deep all too shallow.
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Her picture makes her look like a cool cat that is actually worth talking to..but her lj..holy fucking shit, man. 1/16 of my brain cells committed suicide.
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