I think its better than the other one

[__alwaysmadeup]

Not teen angst... but teen love!
i like it more than the other one. feed back? be honest i can take it

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[swimxinthesmoke]

i like it. i also feel you are in love with me, as i am always eating cheap food, have blue eyes, and stealing your clothes.

alas, it is novemeber.

good poem, nice wording, nothing that stands out particulary, it just all works togther nicely. as my art teacher would say, it has a nice composition, which is a principle of design, i believe.