For Drake.

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Erin Lally

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A rework of the first page

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Erin Lally

Rework of the second page

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Although, in his name was ‘eternal life,’ he without a doubt did not live eternally, king Tut died by the age of 18. He had only ruled for roughly nine years. Historians believe he was murdered. “the discovery of his tomb; the examination and analysis of his mummy revealed that he was a teenager when he died (and thus a child at his accession, since he reigned about a decade)” (Oxford University Press, 2001.) The most likely man to have murdered king Tut was his closest adviser Ay; that is, if King Tut was murdered at all. Ay is suspicious because not only was he king Tut’s adviser, but not long after king Tut’s death, Ay became the next king. A second reason to believe king tut was murdered, was that his tomb (when discovered) did not look like a kings tomb. His tomb was only an eighth the size of Ramses the second’s tomb; “the tomb itself is very small and appears to have been destined for someone of lesser importance. Tutankhamun's unexpected early demise saw the tomb's rushed modification to accommodate the pharaoh.” (Rigbys, M.

Extending this

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Like I recommended this really needs the extension about how Tut became a king at the age of only 8. That paragraph(s) well written, as well as a solid conclusion will push this up to three pages.