flood

[_badly_drawn_]

Title: Flood
Rating: PG-13
Fandoms: Lost
Character/Ships: Charlotte's POV, Dan/Charlotte
Summary: How memories form, fade and persist over time.
Spoilers: Up through 5x03
Disclaimer: I do not own Lost or its associated 'verse, nor am I affiliated with it in any way. If I did run things, there'd be a lot less O6 and infinitely more Team Island

Comments

[saved29]

Poor Charlotte!
You made me feel what it must be like to be her, losing everything.
The ending is beautiful, comforting and hopeful.
"she also felt like this was the first time she’d felt connected to anything (anyone). She wondered if that anchor was enough" Wonderful.

[_badly_drawn_]

I'm glad you liked the ending, I wasn't sure if it was a little out of place but at the same time I didn't want to end on a hopeless note. I think (well, hope against all hope anyway, hah) Charlotte will recover.

Thanks for taking the time to give me feedback :)

[pieces_of_april]

I really like this story - and not just because I'm wildly bored in class and any story that provided even the smallest shred of entertainment would be appreciated.

The only thing I'm getting hung up on in terms of "flow" and/or "grammar" is this line "(she’d laughed when Daniel had found the powdered milk and cereal, a childish glee apparent in the upturned corners of his lips)" - I'm reading the "she'd" as "she would" and not "she had" - but that just might be me.

Although I can't say your fic has persuaded me to jump on the Lost bandwagon, I will say that it has persuaded me to check out more of your Lost stories, (especially on Tuesday nights 6pm-8pm) : D

[danlotteshipper]

Charlotte had memorized the way Daniel looked at her when he told the truth (because she could see something hidden just behind his eyes when he didn’t).

I liked that line especially. I loved the whole thing. :) And the conclusion I thought was perfect-o, the metaphorical storm and all. Yup. Great fic!

[buongiornodaisy]

Charlotte's memory loss is exaggerated (if it were as serious as the fic implied, she wouldn't have been so nonchalant about forgetting her mother's maiden name). That being said, this was a very well-written fic. I don't agree with the extent of the memory loss, but you conveyed it extremely well. As someone said upthread, you make the writer feel how Charlotte's feeling.

(Also recommended this to a rabid Dan/Charlotte shipper friend of mine)

[sursumcorda]

Her memories are shattering now, tiny fractures spreading and weaving through time and space as she forgot what the piano in her living room sounded like, forgot how the noise of three giggling and shrieking young girls reverberated through her parents’ house, forgot the name of the first man she ever made love to, forgot every date she’d painstakingly memorized for her archaeology exams.

Break my heart a little more, why doncha? So sad and beautiful at the same time.

[roseywallis]

This was so beautifully heart breaking. You wrote Charlotte's emotions so well, all of the little details she's forgetting... absolutely beautiful fic.