kudos for the effort at a rhyme scheme. 'partaken' seems a bit forced, though. First stanza very nice. I'd maybe change to "too jaded" so that the grammar matches the next line.
I take it you had a run-in with the ex that didn't go well? Hope you're not stewing in it too much. The best revenge is to be okay without her.
Hey!! I'm not sure what that means.....I hope you're not taking it as being mean or judgmental. I always try to find something I can suggest to be improved upon - I figure a writer doesn't learn anything with the usual 'oh, that's so good.' I hate it when people do that to me. Not that I've been writing much recently......
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I take it you had a run-in with the ex that didn't go well? Hope you're not stewing in it too much. The best revenge is to be okay without her.
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