I love this first line! Wonderfully creative imagery! I might change the next line to be the world smiling up at us - to continue the vision of you both being as high as angels
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Dear-dear kitestream. i always love reading your comments. Your idea concerning 2nd line is creative - gonna think about it - will lwt you know (or you see the corrected version straightaway (especially if you got rss feed on veganazi, georgiaskydiver, my (probabbly) journals. Yes, I love to fetch a melange of pictures-ideas-metaphors. In contrary to Nabokov who once said - he, who thinks clearly - speaks clearly. As to "blessed rage" line - you gotta remind me - I'll pop in some versified explanation. Tis said you gotta geeling that the message of my poem is 'I'm crap without my love' - FAR FROM THAT And thanks for your kind words
Hnh. Far From that. I have to wonder whether I'm reading wrong or you're not conveying what you really feel. The whole third stanza, to me, reads as a person very down on him/herself. Although the wasted too much time part seems to suggest more frustration than sadness, but frustration is just a different form of kicking oneself. Am I taking that completely out of context?
No, I don't get feeds on anyone. I should. The stalker in me would be entertained. Plus, it would be a lot easier to find new entries for you and veganazi, who don't post too often, and I frequently wonder if I've missed some.
I can not ease it neither for you nor anyone - I hate explaining clearly. but you are always quite good in reading the meanings. frustration suits me more because it is more productive. is the stalker in you having high rank - i mean - it occupies the huge part of personality, no? feeds are good i'm getting obsessed w/this idea. try scanning - i always (when posting) wait for a new reply from you.
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As to "blessed rage" line - you gotta remind me - I'll pop in some versified explanation. Tis said you gotta geeling that the message of my poem is 'I'm crap without my love' - FAR FROM THAT
And thanks for your kind words
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No, I don't get feeds on anyone. I should. The stalker in me would be entertained. Plus, it would be a lot easier to find new entries for you and veganazi, who don't post too often, and I frequently wonder if I've missed some.
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is the stalker in you having high rank - i mean - it occupies the huge part of personality, no?
feeds are good i'm getting obsessed w/this idea.
try scanning - i always (when posting) wait for a new reply from you.
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