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Better Then Being Alone

Aug 25, 2005 05:01

Title: Better Then Being Alone

Rating: PG-13 for a reference to sex

Genre: Angst/Drama

Word Count: 362

Summary: Descriptions of an unhappy marriage--not because of abuse or adultry, but because of the problem that comes with knowing someone so well that they've become a complete stranger.

( You yell at him for wasting money on the horses again, when really you’re screaming at him for being so careless with you and letting something that was once so exciting become so sickeningly comfortable. )

Comments 7

javajunkie13 August 25 2005, 21:36:05 UTC

Oh, I really love this. I know I've told you before, but I really, really do. You've captured the emotions so well, and the idea that it's not some big dramatic thing that caused the problems, it just happened.

You only continue the discussion because without it there is silence. And with the silence comes thought, and the thoughts bring regret.

I love that, it makes my heart ache in the best way possible.

And the last sentence *whimper*, I think I've told you before it kills me dead. Really fantastic job. :)

_brit_chick_ August 26 2005, 16:56:05 UTC

lol, i'm sorry for killing you dead. Is it wrong that that kinda makes me happy? Not that you're killed dead, of course. Just that my writing did that... *evil smile*

Aren't you glad i didnt change the characters to be Remus/Sirius or even Lily/James? You'd be crying your eyes out.

javajunkie13 August 26 2005, 18:03:49 UTC

i'm sorry for killing you dead. Is it wrong that that kinda makes me happy?

Not at all! It should make you happy. It's always good to kill someone dead (with your writing, chill out government.)

dude_like_tchar August 26 2005, 08:59:49 UTC

....wow....very emotionaly charged and very thought provoking. I think you've described the feelings and situation of the couple well. Well done! xx

_brit_chick_ August 26 2005, 16:59:22 UTC

Thank you so much! The emotion came from marriages I've seen that are like this, and also my own view on marriage. lol, not exactly the happiest opinions, i suppose.

Thanks for the feedback!

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_brit_chick_ November 6 2005, 02:02:03 UTC

lol, i know, i haven't written in soooooo long (save for a couple AP English essays. but those really don't count). But I'm so effing BUSY!!!! School's a bitch, you know that. Hopefully next semester I'll be in a writing class with Mrs. J (she said she's going to start a Writing for College class or something cause playwriting was cancelled--plus i didnt fit into any of her classes. gr!).

lol, anyways, i promise to write as soon as i have time. maybe over thanksgiving break! HUZZAH!!! that'd be sweet.

anyways, see you monday, dear. As I write you to right now, you are trying to jump over the balcony for your husband. btw: you were amazing on Friday. I know i told you before, but it was sooo good! I kinda wanna go read the book now...

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_brit_chick_ April 30 2006, 16:33:23 UTC

aw, thank you! I find writing original fics is SO much harder then fanfiction, so I'm really proud of this one :)