Random Inspiration

[_darkmousy_]

-It's dark and my chest feels like it's going to explode. I stand at the edge of the dimly lit stage looking out at the many blurred faces that watch me, silent, waiting for my first move. I swallow hard, my heart racing with intense fear as well as excitement. I feel the sweat collecting on my forehead; my back arches as I look down at the guitar

Comments

[turbata]

I will comment anyways, bitch. :D I like it an I can see it going somewhere or just staying as is. It's a nice chunk of writing and you know it's good when it can stand alone.

[_darkmousy_]

The smell of snuffed out ciggarets and beer linger in the dingy hallway leading up to my apartment. I hum the tune to my own composition as I let my eyes wander along the walls, taking in the familiar sights of cracked walls, cobwebs and wet spots. Not so much home-sweet-home, but I suppose it was close enough. I couldn't really complain, however. I could be living on the street alone and hungry, so I had to be somewhat greatful of this poor excuse of a dwelling. Since it was just my mother and me on our own we couldnt afford much of anything else. Rolling my eyes as two kids, of who I dont recongize, run by, the second one hitting me on his way by

[sweetness808]

please go off on tangents like this more often <3333

[therestisdetail]

oooh... colleen like!

and now for your veryveryvery late comment x.-

i like the immediacy of it: everything is very clearly detailed but at the same time the descriptions serve to propel the piece along. lots of good sensory details.

the beginning sounds like how the start of a panic attack feels, so yay that =D

ewies, the mother grosses me out already >_>;; i'm just saying.

also very nicely done is the characterization of the main character. as of yet you've given very few visual cues, but a lot of personality carries over as this kid walks us through his night.

very nice =]

<3

~kaos~

[wolves_shryne]

AHHHHHHHH!!!!!! I LOVE IT!!!!!!! *GLOMP*