Long Day: Heroes

[_hazelnutcoffee]

Title: Long Day
Author: blueeyelinerx
Rating: PG
Word Count: 855
Pairing/Character: Claire, HRG
Summary: Her father’s a liar and her mother’s brain is bleeding and there are strange people in her house, holding her family hostage and she doesn’t even care.
Spoilers/Warnings: short post ep for Unexpected

Comments

[c_quinn]

"Claire almost pushes him, just to see what’d happen"

Fantastic line.

Great work.

[hobbit_feet]

Awesome. You portrayed Claire's anger and bleakness very well. Love the last line.

[lunais_cross]

Awesome. I liked it, especially the last line.

"...and the guy who looks the caveman in the Geico commercials..."

Haha, yes, Ted's resemblence to the Geico cavemen is simply uncanny.

[defybrevity]

I love Claire as much as I love Heroes itself, so this was really nice to read. I loved it, even though I do believe there will be a lot more commotion in the actual episode. But I loved it anyway, because it's a great introspective piece. I really loved this line:

Claire is broken and she’s bleeding and no one can even tell because she’s indestructible.

I can't tell you why, but it's my favorite of this very nicely crafted ficlet.

I must give you kudos, also, for making me realize exactly who Ted looks like -- the Geico caveman! You're absolutely right! I knew he looked familiar!

Anyway, wonderful job.