I can't have any more scenes that I do already... I had to cut a lot. I do have a time limit. I actually changed the ending... rearranged a little I think it might make more sense. Ann and Destiny got another scene where they're... cute together. I didn't like that it was called Destiny but it began and ended with Antony so I fixed it so Destiny dies last... I'll send you the new scenes. As far as Destiny's cutting problem, you see it three times and there's really not many other places to throw it in at... so what make it clearer to you that it's a problem. That's exactly what happens at the end of act I... he still thinks he's ok but he agrees to go because he knows that Destiny needs to... was that not clear? If it's not I'll re-write a little to see if I can make it more clear. Kim and Antony didnt have a relationship earlier in the story... you see them meet and flirt around a little bit and then by the time the second act picks up they're together.
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