Be Careful

[_lora_tempesta_]

Does anyone ever read my poetry anyways?  Is it utter shit or something?  I'll just put it underneath a cut so you don't have to read it if you don't want to.  If you do, please comment so I know what you think, good or bad.

Be Careful

There might be times in your life
Where temptation will start to simmer
The urge to look, to read and know
Just to

Comments

[buttaflykisses3]

I do like this but I think the line:

Well this happens just take care

Is that right? I think it sounds kind of odd. Or maybe there is supposed to be a comma? Or I'm just reading it wrong because I am not nearly as smart as any of you. But yeah... I do like it:)

[mortal_maiden]

*waves* I read your stuff! I just don't always comment because I don't have a lot of time to anymore. And I don't descriminate, either - my lack of commenting goes to everybody! I just really, really don't have a lot of time now, what with school and everything. I'm sorry.

At any rate... the words and subject of the poem are good, but I don't get the rhythm of it. -_-; Certain lines just don't fit to me. I guess that's why I like reading aloud and listening to poetry, because the meter is easier to hear. That's part of the challenge of reading poetry, I know... but every now and then - like with this one - it is just so much easier to hear it from the author's mouth. Well. I do still like it though. ^_^

[bloodrebel333]

There might be times in your life
Where temptation will start to simmer
The urge to look, to read and know
Just to gain insight, just a glimmer

Well this happens just take care
Your heart is fragile from yesterday
You never know what you will see
You never know what they'll say.

I like these two strophes most.

mmmhhhh...its great

[anonymous]

yeah, like it