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[_red_room]

He waited at the door silently, uncertain whether he should enter or turn away while he still had the chance. He stared at the colossal doorway. It stood at least nine feet tall, and four feet across; it seemed unnecessarily large. He did not understand why a door so large was needed in a place which seemed so quiet, a so-called place for rest. The

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lasl

[__srilanka]

I think that it comes off as a bit too pretentious and perhaps overdone. Your skill is obviously immense, but I feel that this story doenst reveal your full potential. You need a different approach.

[moistclownbaby]

I liked that, at times it confused me, I thought you went out of topic with the looking at shoes thing because that was kind of boring, but I thought it was put together well. But I agree with __srilanka even though I don't know your writing style, from this it seems that you know what you're doing.