Advice essential!

[_riotproof]

My honors poetry assignment is to write a weekly paper in any format concerning the question 'What is poetry?'. I wrote a paper last week that the teacher didn't like. Because of that and other reasons, I'm in threat on being kicked out of class. Anyway, I decided to do Tuesday's paper as a poem. It needs to be fantastic because not only am I

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still havent packed

[thanatos000]

i would change last line to revolution of consciousness/ of the conscience

but honestly, i'm not uberwowed. i think its a little sub par given your being you and all.

slash and burn then
show me the next draft

Re: still havent packed

[_riotproof]

I'm trying to figure out how to draw a conclution that is acceptable for an accademic surrounding. I couldn't think of one, so I admit to throwing in whatever bullshit came to my mind. I don't like deadlines. Hm.

I think the major issue is that I don't think of this as a poem...more a report in poetry format.

I'm going to see you in Novemeber, of course.

And yes, start packing!

[university_girl]

Rach,

I wish I could comment and offer up my opinnion of your work. But the truth is, I find myself unable to come up with any comment. I am just writing so you know I am reading and do actually find this interesting. :-) I am just feeling very unable to comment on anything these days. Wishing you all the good vibes...

Melissa :-)

[_twentyonegrams]

I really enjoyed that.

[weloseourselves]

I like this poem, but it seems a bit of two minds: in half you're discussing poetry, and in half you seem to be discussing your experience with poetry, which is something slightly different. I'd pick one or the other (given the assignment, I'd suggest the former), which i think will help the flow a lot

[_riotproof]

Thank you so much! And of COURSE I wanted to hear it, otherwise i wouldn't have posted. I really needed suggestions on how to turn this into something I could hand it...and you've just helped me more than you can imagine. I'm going to work on it again in a bit.l I'll try re-post.

hey hey groovy

[heresyourpizza]

howve you been lately? ive been really self absorbed, as you can probably tell...is all that college stuff going okay?

it naws on my mothertoe

[_riotproof]

Naw, it's cool..college = buulllshit. I think i might take a year off. I hope you're doing alright! Don't die on me!