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Day 1 - Boys Keep Swinging

Nov 06, 2005 19:13

Day 1 - Boys Keep Swinging
Rating - PG
Word Count- 2381
Disclaimer- The Beatles are not mine and I do not claim the following events to be true. There is reference to Chuck Berry's song Brown Eyed Handsome Man and the title comes from the David Bowie song of the same name.

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oh_johnny_ November 7 2005, 00:55:27 UTC

Bravo!

This made me smile for lots of reasons: Brown Eyed Handsome Man is one of my favourite songs Ever; the whole bit with the turnip truck driver; the two art students; the three-tit women. Wonderful!

And we're off! I'm very excited about seeing how this project goes - and reading this I got all nervous about it :-)

thisbe November 7 2005, 01:04:02 UTC

reading this I got all nervous about it---> seeing that I had a comment made me more nervous than I was before! Thank you for the kind review, this is my maiden voyage as a writer in a Beatle ship which is probably quite evident :)

I found it hard to restrict myself from having the boys kiss.
I can't wait to read what you and everyone else write :D It's going to be awesome.

♥

oh_johnny_ November 7 2005, 01:18:27 UTC

It's not evident at all - you wrote that very well. Just the right amount of goofiness - John all out of control and Paul torn between joining him and getting business taken care of. Very true to them, I think.

pattieono November 7 2005, 02:14:53 UTC

Have you heard Paul's version on "Run Devil Run"? I love it !!!
very cajun......

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alexhuntley November 7 2005, 01:44:52 UTC

So cute. Very nicely done!

thisbe November 7 2005, 02:26:53 UTC

Thank you.

banburytale November 7 2005, 02:08:45 UTC

Yay, the beginning! And well-begun it is! I particularly loved Paul's reaction to being told he's pretty.... :P

thisbe November 7 2005, 02:28:22 UTC

Haha. Me too. XD
I picture a little embarassed scowl. Pretty lil Paulie.

catnip_martini November 7 2005, 02:40:05 UTC

Ooooh, what a nice beginning for this!! :D I like the fact that it's completely out of my-- or anyone's-- control until it gets to their chapter... very nice. I'm excited about this.

Cate

catnip_martini November 7 2005, 02:40:54 UTC

Oh, and your "name" bit, "peradventure"? Carry my children. XD For you rock, majorly.

*strolls off humming "English Tea"*

Cate

thisbe November 7 2005, 02:52:21 UTC

The song just came on as I read this, creepy! :o
I loved the bit in his concert where he explains the word, haha.

Peradventure I'm Amazed!
No one ever seems to find that as funny as I do. ._.

catnip_martini November 7 2005, 02:54:38 UTC

Me too! *giggle* I was dying laughing (though it got a little lost in the sobs).

I LOVE THAT. I say that to everyone, "Peradventure I'm Amazed". No one I know in "real life" gets it, but I think it's so funny.

Cate

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pattieono November 7 2005, 02:58:31 UTC

oooohh, I get it ! was George having a premonition, and that's why that line of "Brown Eyed Handsome Man" came to his head? The inmature banter is very appropriate for that age, i think. This is going to be GOOOOOOOOD!!!!!

thisbe November 7 2005, 03:11:44 UTC

Premonition? I didn't think of it that way XD... More of a sneaky way of showing his emotions at that time and maybe alluding to a little Paul/George. But I like that.

Thanks. As I was writing I kept thinking, George just say how you feel! And give him a hug, but... They're boys. Ugh. Haha. If it's one thing I've learned from my brothers it's that they don't talk.