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DAY 11: HARDER TO BREATHE

Apr 30, 2006 22:30

Day Eleven: Harder To Breathe
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: 3,424.
Disclaimer: They're not mine. I love them, but they're not mine. Therefore, this is a work of fiction, and-- as far as I know-- has no resemblance to events past, present, or future.

( Day Eleven: Harder To Breathe )

Comments 20

oh_johnny_ May 1 2006, 11:01:47 UTC

Oh God. This is so good. I've missed your writing.

I'm so happy that they told each other they loved each other - and it was just right to have Paul say it first and John react the way he did.

And the sex was fabulous.

Lovely.

catnip_martini May 1 2006, 19:46:44 UTC

*blush* Oh thank you... I'm so glad you enjoyed it, I always love hearing from you 'cause I love your writing too.

It seemed right to have that happen; it seemed the right time.

Thanks very much, as always. ♥

Cate

oh_johnny_ May 1 2006, 21:17:18 UTC

You're welcome. By the way, you might want to put a note up over at johnheartpaul so that people will know to come check here. Everyone will be so excited!

apt42bsketchart May 1 2006, 23:57:45 UTC

Eee :3

The sex scene was so fresh and energetic and hot! Paced really well.

My brain broke, I don't have much else to say, lol.

catnip_martini May 3 2006, 04:12:25 UTC

Ehehehe. :D I broke your brain. Hehe. ^_^

Cate

nervousanxiety May 2 2006, 01:03:55 UTC

This was wonderful! I really liked the fact that they were still being shy with one another. The looks, the touches...well, I suppose who wouldn't be a little shy when in love? And they are in love. Ahhh. Wonderful.

P.S. Teh secks was amazing. I need a cigarette.

♥

catnip_martini May 3 2006, 04:20:55 UTC

Ahhh... a lot of this is actually internal, for me. I'm very much like the in-love-John I write when I'm in love. Ha. So there you go.

Ahh! Thank you so much! :D I try.

Cate

cinicolives May 2 2006, 01:24:47 UTC

Oh wow.

I loved this. Definately one of the best chapters.

It was just so romantic and fresh. You did it prefectly because there was enough shyness and jovial banter that it seemed realistic but there was still that sweetness and love between them.

I adored the end. I seriously felt myself tearing up.

"Nothing. Everything," he replied, giddy. "D'you have a bottle of wine, then, d'you want to woo me under the stars?"

"That's your bag, Romeo, I'm just in it for the sex," Paul muttered, lying back on the blanket, smiling up at John gleefully.

Ahahaha.

And as everybody has said; the sex was amazing. Heh.

catnip_martini May 3 2006, 04:25:30 UTC

Hee... thank you so much! I really appreciate all these comments. I was nervous about this chapter. I'm so glad it went over well.

I thought the banter was just so in character for those two-- through all the years they knew each other, it was always there.

Thanks again, luv. :)

Cate

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catnip_martini May 3 2006, 04:56:32 UTC

Heee... thank you so much, I always love hearing from you. (And, ahh, so glad the sex went over well. That scene took me forever but I'm happy with it now.)

I thought the being-on-the-floor was apropos; it's somehow more intimate, and then there's the metaphor of "putting everything on the floor," kind of.

♥ Thank you again and again. You're too cool.

Cate