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[a_muse_mi]

my heart breaks
when i see people
that are not all that they could
be;
that don't see all their
potentiality

and then i wonder
in the eyes of [certain] others

is this
me?

[[...is my heart breaking from the force of
love
or pity?
if i were god
it would break from
love.
but i am human.

i think my heart breaks
pure.
but does it?]]

Comments

[declan_black]

potentiality should just be 'potential'.
Other than that, it's good. Short and simple, but to the point.

[declan_black]

hehe. do you know that kids song that some people sang in like children's church and stuff? no, you probably don't b/c i can't even give you the name of it to help you out.....BUT i do have a point.... it has the word "potentiality" in it...and i thought of the fact that it probably is not a real word before i added it...and the fact that if it was, i might not even be using it correctly....but, for some reason, i liked the added 'flair,' persay, of the extra syllables....and thus, i decided, what the heck, it's my poem, i'll endure the wrath of daniel and such others criticizing the fact that i'm not a "gramac-tician" ;)

but thx. i like that you like words and are smart enough to learn big ones, and pick out made up ones by said people like me. hehe.