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"Last Night"

Jul 12, 2005 01:35

Title: Last Night
Author: Nia
Rating: PG
Summary: "The front end of a truck and the crooked linoleum tiles, the long hallways, the bright lights, the dark exam room, the surprise of night, Abby's skin above her waistband and the sound of her wrist in the crash, it is all last night, which is a night that fits nothing else in her life, which is a ( Read more... )

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aeonian July 12 2005, 17:19:37 UTC

Thank you!

starberry_slash July 13 2005, 04:26:54 UTC

Your story was excellent. The fact of Neela's distraction caused the accident sets the mood and adds a hint of the personal demons that she must be dealing with. Keep up the good work.

aeonian July 18 2005, 04:41:09 UTC

Thanks! That's exactly what I was going for. :)

tremblingmoon July 15 2005, 16:08:56 UTC

Really beautiful and sad. I love the intense starkness of your style, and I think you really do wonders with Neela's [internal] voice. Excellent.

aeonian July 18 2005, 04:39:27 UTC

Thanks so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

crashcart9 August 22 2005, 02:27:37 UTC

Sad, but good characterization and overall very enjoyable.
Alexandria

aeonian August 23 2005, 03:50:29 UTC

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it. :)