Excerpt time!
Im actually way, way behind. I'm going to try to stick with it though, to see how much i can't get done. A lot of the difficulty in this is my job. When i get home from work, sometimes i just don't feel like being creative and writing, and something mindless like a video game is preferable. I know, excuses, excuses. Here's the excerpt:
( The beginning )
( The beginning )
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I like it! It's interesting, if a bit all over the place (but really, it's NaNo, so... :P .) It makes me wonder who he is and who the Iron Guard are, as well as what the job is. I especially like the lines
He didn’t like it up here, too much sky above him. There isn’t the comfort of the crossways above you, and the warm glow of the yellow light bars.
Very nice! Good luck with NaNo :) !
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about the all over the place, i think one problem might be, is that im writing it as if the reader knows the universe im talking about, when in reality the world your in might take some explaining. Its set in my friends and I's shared universe we've been working on since high school, so im sort of used to talking in shorthand.
all in all thanks for the comments, they were greatly appreciated!
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