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[adam_epp]

Apparently, I have now taken being late to an art form. Well, here's the next chapter in my series. The end is coming, and I figure I should hurry up before Kubo makes this story into too much of an AU on me.

Title: Long Way to Goodbye VIII
Rating: The much beloved T, where characters may swear and possess sexuality, but not so much that I will be

Comments

[kari_izumi]

Damn, Renji's always the guy that throws a wrench in everyone's plan! :P At least he tells poor Karin the truth, though.

Oh my. I hadn't realized how much I missed this fic and the updates until reading this, and I love how this has all turned out. I only thing I hate is that I may have to wait until way after boot camp in mid-April before I'll get to read the ending of this (Assuming you aren't planning any more updates between now and Monday afternoon).

And poor Isshin, trying to do his best to save human lives and having to worry about the well-being of his daughter on top of it. :( I miss Isshin in the manga, BTW. Just...throwing that out there.

I await the conclusion.

[adam_epp]

Renji's not throwing any wrenches in my plans. Having him be an antagonist seriously helps this story out; somebody had to stir up trouble and, well, I thought it fit him the most to react very negatively to Rukia's fate. Byakuya, for instance, is not exactly hot-blooded, and he's the only other guy all that close to Rukia (furthermore, Byakuya has no relationship whatsoever to Ichigo's friends, unlike Renji, so he was a no go

[kari_izumi]

Hey, not complaining 'bout Renji here. ;) It certainly does make sense that he'd flip out and want revenge on anyone that would harm Rukia, even if it's one of his friends.

I'm guessing it'll be too much for Ichigo to recognize Karin before someone kills him (I don't see him coming out of this alive...or sane, in light of him Hollow killing Rukia). I figured from the beginning that it was leading to this, but still. Poor kid.

I'm almost half-tempted to ask for your address, so I could at least get the print-out of the last two or three chapters shipped to Illinois once I get my division address. Not like I'll have anything else good to do there on my free time lol ;) Hope that's not too creepy or anything, but as you are aware of by now, I seriously fangirl this fic.

[adam_epp]

They don't have internet cafes or anything where you're going? This notion of no internet is unfamiliar to me.

And argh, the ninth chapter be delayed, too. Professors have sprung essays upon me!

[vesperh]

Excellent job on this chapter, Adam! You really hit your stride here. I particularly liked some of your setting descriptions. I loved the way you tied the landscape into Chad’s memories as he was running-that was very well done.

You need a word here:
Are you implying anything untoward XXXX my integrity (about?)

My only other editorial comment is that you might want to try reading the dialogue out loud. Some characters sound very natural but others are less so; the read-aloud trick will make clunky spots readily apparent.

[adam_epp]

Hey, thanks. I like the concluding chapters the most in this story, as the first couple are just build-up to the big climax.

/Word added

I'll keep your comments about dialogue, in mind, although I think the next one has a bit less dialogue in it than this one.