Fic: Colossus (AoNoEx/ A:tS crossover) Prologue through chapter 2

[adoxerella]

I should have been cleaning today. I should have been knitting today. I should have done my taxes today. Instead I had a tiny plot bunny this morning while trying to sip my coffee and wake up. So I wrote, a lot

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[angelfirenze]

Um, I have to say, I have absolutely no idea what this story's about and - thus - feel completely out of my depth commenting on it in any way. It'd be like me writing something about The Inheritance Cycle and asking you to do the same.

As it is, I missed what you were talking about and need you to point it out. Maybe I can help then.

[adoxerella]

If you missed it, then I'm pretty sure it isn't there.

Remember at the beginning of the Potter-Mustang RP you kept accusing me of writing Elricest and I kept saying I didn't see it. I was afraid I was doing it again in the last part, except you know Okumuracest instead.

I figured that you wouldn't get the subject matter. I was more looking for someone to proof it and let me know if there were run on sentences and other technical shit.

Although I do feel the need to point out, I have read some of your stuff that I was clueless about. When I first read Battering I hadn't the foggiest clue who anyone from FMA was, and look at me now. Of course, Dark Avenger finally got beyond my knowledge of Dexter and in that case I didn't dive into the series, so you have a point.

[angelfirenze]

Why yes, that is true, but since I don't even know the name of the fandom, I couldn't possibly even start to get into it if I had the money or further inclination. *hint hint* As for clerical stuff, sure, as soon as I get some more sleep (I swear, one of these days I'll either get caught up or collapse. Grrr.), I'll get that editing to you, because I did find some stuff. *nods*

You read 'Dark Avenger'? *glee*

Okay, my Feral!Connor icon has nothing to do with this, but I've been wanting badly to use it and I've decided I don't need an excuse. *nods*