Comments | adrasteicfic: Fic: "Of Geneses" [Avatar, PG-13, Aang, Zuko, Katara, Toph, various canon-ish pairings]

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Fic: "Of Geneses" [Avatar, PG-13, Aang, Zuko, Katara, Toph, various canon-ish pairings]

Oct 22, 2007 00:12

Title: Of Geneses
Author: sporkyadrasteia
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Four elements. Four children. Four discoveries that spurred Fate.
A/N: Contains four ficlets that are not connected to one another but follow a common theme and follow in a chronological order.

( this is how it all began )

Comments 11

emmahleedotc October 22 2007, 04:59:43 UTC

Ooh... anything 'four elements' is just ... ooohhh ... to me.

I especially liked Aang's for some reason... and Katara's - awesome.

Pakku/Kanna is SO canon and you know it. fanon knows it. Pakku/Kanna ftw

dharmavati October 22 2007, 13:45:27 UTC

Ooh... anything 'four elements' is just ... ooohhh ... to me.

:D I'm the same, so this plotbunny only came to me naturally!

Thank you for the review! XD

amiraelizabeth October 22 2007, 05:05:35 UTC

Absolutely lovely. Your writing is fantastic. :)

dharmavati October 22 2007, 13:46:03 UTC

Wow! Thank you! :)

ari_griffin October 22 2007, 05:35:01 UTC

"Zuko, opening his bewildered eyes to this strange world, took this opportunity to sneeze, hurtling a fireball towards his uncle's face."

That scene is begging for a picture.
I loved this. It was excellent. I can not wait to read more of your work.

dharmavati October 22 2007, 13:53:13 UTC

That scene is begging for a picture.

Hahaha! XD That image was one that particularly stuck out in my mind while I was writing Zuko's bit!

I loved this. It was excellent. I can not wait to read more of your work.

Thank you! Although my muse has been rather sporadic as of late. :(

hikari_cyhan October 22 2007, 13:46:22 UTC

You managed to capture well the essence of each of their childhoods. I especially liked Aang's, and Zuko setting Iroh's beard on fire.

However, you change tenses quite a bit in here. I only noticed in Zuko's and Toph's ficlets, but I was just skimming over the whole thing.

dharmavati October 22 2007, 13:56:12 UTC

However, you change tenses quite a bit in here. I only noticed in Zuko's and Toph's ficlets, but I was just skimming over the whole thing.

Thank you for pointing that out! Tenses are perhaps my worst enemies when writing and while writing this one, I chose to write in present tense and then, due to a few awkward places, I changed my mind and it is more than possible that I missed a few verbs or slipped up again!

princesssketchy October 22 2007, 20:35:27 UTC

I loved this a lot. You have an excellent writing style :)

dharmavati October 23 2007, 19:40:27 UTC

Thank you! :)