Proximity

[adrenalin211]

Title: Proximity
Author: adrenalin211
Rating: AC for sexy!times and language
Characters: Jack Bauer/Renee Walker
Summary: Jack can feel his pulse hammer against his cell phone, a twisting nervousness forming in his stomach and, holy hell, blood rushing to where he feels her voice most.
Disclaimer: Not mine
Author’s notes: This was rush-written for The Porn

Comments

[leigh57]

See it's embarrassing to talk about fic like this on el jay, because like, well, really. Remember the thing you said over the weekend? Well. I wanna do that, too. Among other things. Ahem. Where was I now?

First, I love that you actually did the porn battle. You are completely a champion rock star. *bows* Second, oh god the way that the love/sex combo just gets to me. You know I don't take my porn straight up, but you have it all in here dude -- the stuff that makes me have to pause to be appropriate in LJ responses and the stuff that makes me metaphorically melty.

I love:
her voice alive in the receiver
the thought of Jack rearranging himself and fumbling for his wallet (I'M JUST SAYING)
the way he notices the pitch of her voice (oh, my issues)
Like how despite the way this intoxicating blend of love and arousal announces her physical proximity like fireworks, his mind has never actually left her this whole trip. That line, just yes, exactly, that is why you are doing it right when a whole lot of other people do it wrong

[adrenalin211]

See, I'm just glad you thought this was hot and in character! That was like... the only goal of this exercise! LOL.

I'm so glad that you felt both the love and the lust. I can't just write straight up porn. Context is important, and even though it's the porn battle, I feel like I still need a LITTLE something. But THIS TIME I DIDN'T CHEAT WITH SETUP. So... I guess that has to count for something, doesn't it?

She so would not be able to wait! I mean, I'm assuming, because I wouldn't be able to wait. (Oh man. You're so right about how fics like these make it hard to not LJ overshare).

I'm so glad you enjoyed this, beebs. Thanks for leaving such awesome feedback. And for reading this SO last-minute like the supportive super-heroine that you are.

&hearts. You're awesomer.

[adrenalin211]

P.S. Since I can't edit. OMG THAT SHOULD HAVE BEEN SEASON NINE. Repartee and steamy smooches.

[adrenalin211]

ROWR!!! Jack really likes Naughty!Renee.

Thanks for reading! And yes! You totally inspired naughtiness. :)

you were the only person who wrote Jack/Renee in the whole PB. WTF, man, WTF??

I know! WTF, PB? W.T.F.

[chamomiletea24]

God a mia!!!! What's going on in my pants?!? I do not know... AHHHHHHHH! Wow girl...that's really all I can say. :P

[adrenalin211]

Ahahahaha. Thanks for reading!:) Glad you liked it.

[myheadisclear]

Okay I've had two people now point me in your direction and said I should read your fics and I am so glad they did, after reading this one... Whoa!
I agree with everyone above. Totally hot.
And my favorite line:
(Like how despite the way this intoxicating blend of love and arousal announces her physical proximity like fireworks, his mind has never actually left her this whole trip.)
Beautifully written!

[adrenalin211]

That is such a compliment. And AHHH, so flattering to hear that I'm being recced!

I'm glad that you enjoyed! Thanks for taking the time to comment!

[myheadisclear]

You're more than welcome. I have been conversing with Leigh57 quite a bit over the last few days, since I am on holiday right now and have spare time to write and read, so it's been fantastic to be able to come to this new realm and enjoy all the delights it has here in 24 land. Fashionably late of course. I find now not many people write 24 fic anymore. However, I've never been one to follow fashion when it's fashionable to follow it lol.
Hope to read more of your fics soon.

[adrenalin211]

You are definitely fashionably late. This fandom always needs new people, so welcome!! And leigh57 and I are still writing. Maybe not as frequently, but I love these two so much that it's hard to let go of making more fictional worlds in which they can be happy.

Hope you had a good vacation!

fddf

[anonymous]

man that was a good one..really

Re: fddf

[adrenalin211]

Thank you so much!