Doctor Who: Warmth and Stillness

[adriana_divolpe]

Title:  Warmth and Stillness
Fandom:  Doctor Who
Rating: G
Characters: Doctor/Donna
Summary:  He lies against her in the stillness of the dark, face buried in her hair, memorising her with every languid breath.
Category: Fluff/Romance
Word Count:  100
Prompt:  #25 - baby [from the Weekly Drabble Challenge at doctor_donna]
Disclaimer: Characters are the property of

Comments

[thenoblethang]

This was gorgeous.
The "She thinks she's fat but he thinks she's beautiful" part was so simply put but was so squee~ (is at a lack of a better adjective)
lovely job :D

[adriana_divolpe]

Thank you so much. :) Yeah, I thought that worked best in the simplest words. Thank you for the lovely comment. :D *hugs*

[adriana_divolpe]

Thank you so much, your comments are always so helpful and insightful. :D

I'm really glad you like that She thinks she’s fat but he thinks she’s beautiful. I was trying to think of something to connect the line before it to the next little section, and when that came to mind I initally really liked it, but then got worrying that it sounded too simple, and then I liked it again, because it was simple. ;D

[topaz_eyes]

This is gentle and sweet and vivid. I see a hint of worry in there too, which works really well for his characterization.

Technical/stylistic critique strongly desired, if you are in such a mood to indulge me.

Since you asked... This reads very well--it's really hard to get a drabble down right, but you did it. I love the rhythm and flow of this, too. Drabbles are kind of like poetry to me, so sound and rhythm are more important when I read.

One minor nitpick: He thinks it will be any day, now. You don't need the comma.

This is lovely. Well done. ♥

[adriana_divolpe]

It makes me so glad that you did pick up some worry there; I was debating including a couple of additional lines to get that across but in the end I thought they were a bit redundant.

I was going to politely disagree with you about that comma, as I was very fond of it for reasons I don't fully understand, but after thinking about it on and off for a couple hours I think you're right. I'll change it. Thanks for pointing that out. :)

You are awesome for taking the time to leave such a lovely and detailed comment. I really do appreciate it, thank you so much. :)

[bas_math_girl]

Absolutely gorgeous romantic drabble!! Love it!!

[adriana_divolpe]

Thank you! :D

[katherine_b]

Pure and gorgeous fluff! Absolutely lovely!

[adriana_divolpe]

Thank you very much! :D I'm glad you like it.