Chapter 5: Descending into Purgatory

[adriatic_air]

Chapter 5 BONDS IN BLOOD
Title: Descending into Purgatory
Disclaimer: All characters belong to me and if you dislike them, TALK TO THE HAND.
A/N: Aha aha! I have surprised! I bet no one expected this so fast, huh? On a side note... I LOVE HITPLAYER'S DRAWING OF RITSUKA AND I SERIOUSLY NEED A PIECE ON SOUBI FUCKING RITSUKA INTO THE GROUND.
*brain

Comments

[anonymous]

OKKAYY.. That was what I was waiting for since..YOU STARTED. COOL COOL COOL! The names are cool, the description of the undergound network and all was..like..really professional! And really, really real. Okay.. I admit the part with Ronald and Kelvin was not bad.

You are going to make it a long long hard and action fight, right?

[anonymous]

I so guessed that vampires will be involved! And I've liked lykens ever since The Underworld! Ur right about the new characters..Its more exciting to have people I dunno about, but I am going to find out about, and I trust you will have very interesting stories for each of them.

Okay..hmm..I know your chapter is really long already, but you could add MORE descripters right? I think you should add more! Alot happened, and it moved fast, but i couldnt really visualise it that well. As in I could, but not very detailed. Like, what did the vampires look like? How do they move?

Yups. =D thats all since ur so impatient. JIAYOU! =D

[adriatic_air]

hmmm... i didnt know you were so into details like how they looked... because i find it kind of long-winded, and doesn't everyone like action better? LOL.

[anonymous]

Because then can visualise it. Plus I thought they would be moving weirdly. Then its more scary? And harder to fight them or something? They do look human-like right..then they use what to tear the doors apart?

I did like the action =DDDDDDDD

hitplayer

[anonymous]

i know what she means!!! about the descriptions and stuff. what's a psychological attack? oh yeah insignians...(: what powers do they have?

ANYWAY AS I TOLD YOU OVER THE MESSAGES I LOVE THIS CHAPTER. hahaha yes until i find that backtracking pales in comparison (heh). so YES YOU HAVE IMPROVED!!!!

i'm so proud of you hahaha (:

Re: hitplayer

[anonymous]

haha this is a favourite!! XDD i can imagine them in my head. it is all very anime-like and action, which i like(:

but yup i want to see more on their individual characteristics too, sheesh maybe we're too demanding X(

hahahaha great work, definitely(:

Re: hitplayer

[adriatic_air]

LOL, PATIENCE, people. Do you think I'll let you guys read on without knowing more about the attacks? There will be explanations in due time!!

haha yaye im glad you think i improved... because i thought i was the only one who did.