Comments | aduvingion: Unlived Memories

aduvingion

Unlived Memories

Feb 14, 2009 03:45

For years, I've always known that I could do it. See people's futures. It's really easy if you've got the gift for it. When I look at your face, I don't just see who you are. I can also see, if I want to, who you could be. What does it look like? Well, you get sort of fuzzy and I'm bombarded by flashes of all the possible ways your life could turn ( Read more... )

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undoing_ February 14 2009, 18:47:23 UTC

"Did you say something?" etc. disrupt the flow more than they should. This is actually rather close to Wilson's style of writing. Clearly, the two of you are more alike than you care to admit.

aduvingion February 14 2009, 20:37:56 UTC

has it occurred to you that PERHAPS the point is the disruption? if you're rattling on and someone intrudes with a question, does that not break the flow of your speech/thought? as for the latter comment, it would make sense if this were the ONLY style in which i write. which the prev entry alr demonstrates isn't true. so...gap in logic much?

undoing_ February 15 2009, 11:24:05 UTC

has it occurred to you that perhaps the disruption is not as well executed as you'd like to think it?! hahaha and er, two of your best prose pieces, this one and three's (not) a crowd, could've come as easily from wilson. so...

aduvingion February 15 2009, 17:07:22 UTC

And pray tell then, oh wise one, how might it be better executed? No use criticising if you can't offer a better alternative. As for the latter statement, now you're shifting the terms of your argument from similarity of a particular style to similarity of writing in general. Methinks you need to build a stronger case than that, honestly.