The beginning of something I just started working on

[agent_spoonman]

The cloud she watched fell in leafs of paper to the ground. The radio continued to play its music, and her sister, mother, father did not notice this phenomenon just outside the car windows. She kept the incident to herself. Next to the disintegrating puff, she took in, there was a low-opacity shadow dripping a bottle of yellow liquid over another

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[agent_spoonman]

Thanks! I'd love some crits (if you have free time), but you might wanna wait because I'll be posting about a 1000 more words of it soon (as in tomorrow).
<3 and have a good night