Comments | agenttyzer: Story Time

agenttyzer

Story Time

Jun 14, 2003 03:41

I've had the impulse to write for the past few days now, and I took a few hours and wrote this.It's only two pages typed, please read it and leave comments. Thank you all. =D

( Morning thoughts )

Comments 5

happypuppy June 14 2003, 12:55:07 UTC

:)

I like it. I think it's really interesting so far. . . I just think that some sentences get a little verbose and confusing. Remember what Gertrude Stein said to Hemingway: "A rose is a rose is a rose."

Overall, though, I like it!

agenttyzer June 14 2003, 20:56:45 UTC

And his reply: "A bitch is a bitch is a bitch." =D

Yeah. I am very verbose with my words, I know that. Rereading it, some sentences are confusing.

Thanks for your input hun. =D

happypuppy June 15 2003, 08:33:06 UTC

lol, Hemingway was the SHIT!! :)

Anytime, suga ;)

koorika June 14 2003, 17:25:53 UTC

Wow! I like it. It's a wonderful piece of writing... Continue with it and show me the rest.

agenttyzer June 14 2003, 20:59:12 UTC

Thanks Elyse. I still need to read your writings... you'll have to give me the link sometime. =D

In this short (very short) story, I just wanted to focus on description and memories, colorful adjectives, those sorts of things.

I don't know if any more will come of that particular story, but if I write anything else, I'll post it up for you. =D