the buck

[ahsavka]

I found him killed
already, there all sprawled out
in the snow, a wreck
of tufted fur and brown-ed blood
I slowed my walk to stare

he was but hide
and bone and ancient blood
and ghostly horn, too long ago
alive to trouble does
that eyed me from the corn

Comments

[anonymous]

Hey, this is akeli. I grew up! XD Sometime I'd like to talk to you again on AIM.

[ahsavka]

Better rhyme (the two stanzas would not agree on what deserved rhymage):

I found him killed
already, there, all sprawled
out in the snow.
a wreck of tufted hair
and brown-black blood
I stopped, I had to know.

he was but hide
and bone and ancient blood
and ghostly horn,
too long ago alive
to trouble does
that eyed me from the corn

[ahsavka]

And another way, but not as good, which is why I followed the second bit's lead (though the first line, 'I found him killed', with a trailing 'already, there' is what got me here in the first place.)

I found him killed already, there
all sprawled out in the snow,
a tufted wreck fur and blood
I slowed my walk to stare

he was but hide and bone
and ancient blood, and ghostly horn,
too long ago alive to trouble does
that eyed me from the corn