[FIC] Hidden Desire

[ai_happy4lucky]

 Made at: 29/02/08
[Oneshot] Hidden Desire

Title: Hidden Desire
Author: ai_happy4lucky
Pairing: PiN
Rating: PG 17+
Genre: angst emo
Summary: He was alone, he was broken, he was needs accompany, but he didn’t want someone to come near him.
This fic I made for myself and whoever read it. I just feel like I wanted to write and so be it. Thank God it’s done.

Comments

[hime_poisoned]

Awww,,
yamapi is lost his mind!!
And jin is so cruel...
Good job!
Read the sequel ok?

[ai_happy4lucky]

okay! i'll post it later!
read it ok? :)

[snow_meow]

I am trying to understand why Pi is the way he is. IS it his desire for Jin making him so crazy.

I don't understand how Ryo who realise it and wants to help Pi but Jin who realise it, feels so helpless to do something.

I do not understand this part ....
When Jin realized it, it was too late. He already made their relationship stuck on the edge and ready to fall in any second. The problem is, Yamapi refuse to fix it, even Jin has truly regret. And Kame felt guilty as like he was the one who cause this, even it’s not what exactly happened. If it was before, Jin will embrace him inside his arms and told him everything will be all right, but now the condition wasn’t the same. He can no longer felt that way toward Kame. How funny when people can easily lose the precious feeling toward someone and replaced it with something new, new relationship.

Is it the Nobuta period? *confused*

[ai_happy4lucky]

aaah~~you got that right!! i'm glad!! XD

yes, it is on Nobuta period...
you do realize that something had happen right?
akame wasn't as close as before...
i dn't know what happened so i imagine it myself...
and wrote this fic

[s7nluv]

i like the story ^_^...and the darkness of it XD...

but it was kinda hard to understand some parts and the grammar is really, off. I hope I'm not sounding rude in suggesting you reread your stuff again or find a beta to do it for you ^_^...

still, i like it though ^_^. Just some parts were really weird to read because of grammar ^_^

[ai_happy4lucky]

erm...you're damn right, man..
i have a grudge moment with grammar...

i don't know how to beta either...

i'm a new comer in this blog for GOD SAKE!!

but ok, i'll try to fix my grammar!

but thx for the comment! and thx for read it too! i'm so glad someone read my fic XD ureshii~~

[ai_happy4lucky]

no, sweety, you;re not rude at all...
i do realize my grammar is sucks and that make all story kinda...off...
sorry.... *sobs*
i'll do my best to fix it! X)