Hear Me.

[aiienzo]

Set at the beginning of KH1, after Riku and Sora are seperated, but before Riku is corrupted by Maleficent.Riku tapped the stick he had been carrying idly against the stone beneath him. It was a shady dark blue filled with cracks that should have been replaced years upon years ago, and sadly reflected the town in itself

Comments

[kiri_ka]

Awwwwww! That was just really really sweet. Really. I got so caught up in it, I forgot that it was for the prompt until just now, and then I awwww'd all over again, but it fits perfectly. Bravo, mellon nin, bravo.

With a jolt of realization, he wound it around and around in his head, letting the longing and penetrating grief melt into his heart and mind, devouring him as he re-evaluated what he had been missing his whole time.
I'm really liking this sentence for some reason. It's just so... poetic.

these are the only few corrections I found to make, but I might have missed some
fourth paragraph thing, second sentence needs capitalization, and I don't think you meant to say 'suck' there lol
the paragraph after that 'her feet her bare'
after that, 'sitting up cross-legged'

[kuroineko_chan]

I wish I had more knowledge about KH D: I so need a console >_>

But a nice story is nice always :D I'm glad you are writing again 8D

Lol I stopped doing my homework cause I wanted to read this you know? XD

*goes back to homework*

btw I shall flood your inbox tomorrow >_>, be warned lol

[aiienzo]

you should definately play it if you get a chance. the story line is so beautifully woven~

and thanks for the inbox flood XD