Story Update

[ailsa_chan]

Bit missing from the beginning, but after trying three times I've given up for a bit and I'll sort it out later.

Comments

[redkun_arc]

Nice chapter. Glad I was finally able to read the rest of it!

[ext_519950]

I really like your writing style :-) Haven't finished yet but just found two typos : should it be "didn't" think he could leave his brother? And also "roumers" is just a typo.
Hope that's vaguely helpful, looking forward to reading the rest once work's done :-)

[ailsa_chan]

Thankyou very much, that's great. I'm really bad at seeing my own mistakes.

Glad you liked it.