[fic] As the Maiden of Deception Falls

[aimeeshii]

Title: As the Maiden of Deception Falls.
Summary: Sometimes there was no such thing as peace and quiet.
Rating: PG-13.
Word Count: 1917.
Pairing: Kyouko Sakura/Sayaka Miki.
AN: This was started, and almost finished, back at the beginning on August. I've just finished it off today but I'm not too happy with how i has turned out. D: I don't remember what

Comments

[eternalilith]

That was a beautiful fic with great emphasis on the surroundings as well as Kyouko and Sayaka's expressions. It's probably just a short scene if it were to be animated, but the ending got me smiling, because it was really somewhat sweet.

You write such pretty stories even if they're not romance-based. *salutes you* <3

[aimeeshii]

Sweet? Haha, I wasn't intending it to be like that at all! I don't really know what I wanted in the end; I was writing in the library while waiting for me lesson whilst you were afk. It kind of just all came out and I went with the flow, I guess.

Not romance-based? ;°A° There was this line:

“Become a peasant with me.” which in Aimee languages means... “Hey, let's be poor together and elope. No family.”

*salutes you right back, sister!* <3

[eternalilith]

But it gave me the impression that it was! xD Now you can work on Yui's prompt LOLOL. 8D

HAHAHAHA! I don't see it that way though! I was thinking that Kyouko was becoming more of an elder sister guiding the younger one with that line, like sibling love. I could never learn your language LMAO.

[aimeeshii]

Oh gosh, ice cubes. I can see this being so cracky! I will definitely use your idea, though. Papa Yui will adore it lmao! Her two daughters becoming one with a crack story~

I should write one of them translation dictionaries LOL. As in the French > English one, but Aimee > Yuka LOLOL.

[seireeii]

Hey there! I absolutely LOVE this! It's amazing, and beautiful, and just awesome! The description is flawless; it draws the reader in, and has its own haunting, lingering tone to it that I love when writers use. I'm not that big a fan of Kyouko/Sayaka, but this story was absolutely lovely, and please, do write more for them! I love your style, and I'll be adding you on FF.net, if that's alright with you. Absolutely wonderful job. xD

[aimeeshii]

Sorry that I've only just round to reading your comment! I must say, I think you're mad for looking that far into my writing! That's probably the biggest compliment I've received about it and my brain just can't handle it. xD

[seireeii]

It's what a fellow writer does, my friend. xD Praise is the best thing you can give someone for writing something, and you definitely deserve it here. Really? I'm flattered. I'm just doing my job as a fellow writer! xD Please, do write more fics and post them on here or FF.net! xD I LOVE your style, and I think I could learn a lot from it.

I typically use first person, but ever since I got into KHR, I've been forced to use third since I don't know the characters very well. The way you write third person is pretty much what I want my third person style to be: haunting, lingering, soft, smooth. I want mine to make an impact, and stick with the reader throughout the duration of it. Yours is flawless in that aspect, so, if it's not too awkward to say, please write more! xD I have a feeling I can learn a lot from you. xD (Like, this comment isn't AT ALL random and creepy...I apologize...)

[aimeeshii]

Where do you post your fics? I'd love to read them sometime! What fandoms are they usually for, too? I'll try to! I mostly post my het stories on here and my, uh, not so het ones on FF as that's what is expected from me. "orz

I've been writing in first person since I started last year and I've only recently been forcing myself to write in third. I find it awkward and I just don't like it, haha. xD First person is where my heart is! My first story was first person in Kyouya's POV (even though it was a troll) so I've just stuck with that and went along with it for all this time. ;w;