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[airelyn]

Decided to make another entry for it :x Am spamming >3

I wrote this random story and yeah it's entitled ageha. HAH. And those reading, I need suggestions, should I make another version of the story, longer and clearer. Cause this short one has tons of mysteries left D: but am afraid a clearer version would spoil the whole thing D:

Comments

[cherrylilwolf]

I like it XD It's sad ;___; *has limited vocab*

[summerloveremix]

;_;

I think it's perfect just the way it is. You could make a longer version but I love the vagueness of this one. It's written is a way where the mystery helps the overall setting and mood. I loved it <33

[airelyn]

I was thinking that too ._. I guess if I ever do write a longer one am not letting anyone read it XD

[x_amadare]

It is beautiful and bittersweet! That I cannot describe with my horrible usage of words! ;____;

[twee91]

hey..you don't know who i am but anyway, your story is nice this way. it let's the reader's imagination flow. so that it's like up to the reader to decide what happened to the girl and stuff. =D your vocabulary is also really good. haha. your style of writing is also nice. the way you describe things is nice. not like for the line: "as the night laid a blanket of loneliness on the beach", most people will probably put something like "the beach was lonely" and blah blah blah. anyway, if you don't mind me pointing out an error (sorry..i think i'm like a critic.. gomen nasai..), it's just a small gramatical error..your this line: "The puzzle lied on the maroon carpet"..the 'lied' should actually be 'lay'. k? sorry if you don't like people pointing out this kind of stuff..just say and i wil never do it again..*worried*

[twee91]

oh and eh..by the way..is your display pic shim chang min from dbsg? =P

[airelyn]

thanks for pointing it out :D

And yes it was Shin Changmin. XD