Comments | aireyelle: Along for the Ride

aireyelle

Along for the Ride - 9/?

Jun 23, 2012 01:02

Title: Along for the Ride
Pairing: 2min, side!Jongkey
Genre: Angst, Fluff, Slight (if any) Smut
Rating: M for language and possible smut
Warning: Bring tissues, you might cry. Feel free to leave those tears in my comment box.

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( He woke to the morning sun, chirping birds, and a ringing cell phone. )

pairing: taemin/key, pairing: jonghyun/key, key, pairing: taemin/minho, angst, slice of life, #fanfiction, 2min, along for the ride, chaptered

Comments 16

chlo7 June 23 2012, 11:32:21 UTC

Even though it was such a sad chapter, I found Kibum's interaction with Taemin at the end of the chapter heartwarming, and I think the dialogues were especially well-written. And his reaction after discovering Taemin's illness is very realistic and in phase with the way you constructed his character throughout this story ^^.

I'm really looking forward to the next chapters, however sad they may be...

aireyelle June 23 2012, 19:20:18 UTC

thanks so much! i didnt feel too confident about my dialogue (i never do) so this really means alot :) comment appreciated!

ext_898100 June 23 2012, 16:49:15 UTC

omg it's so sad, it broke my heart, poor Key, poor Taeminnie.
I liked keys fantasy about perfect life omo make it go true at the end ;3;
I don't want Taeminnie to die *sobs*
but finally one more person knows, someone more to support poor Minnie

aireyelle June 23 2012, 19:21:10 UTC

maknae needs so much support. he's been going through this for far too long by himself :( thanks for commenting!

psychicfeeling June 23 2012, 18:12:17 UTC

SO MANY FEELINGS D:
Ugh, Kibum's reaction is just so perfect, and I could see myself being the same way if I found out my best friend was dying
It's so sad to think that Taemin might not get to live a full happy life TT.TT
♥

aireyelle June 23 2012, 19:23:47 UTC

i love feels! and I agree. i really feel his reaction was kind of appropriate for his relationship with maknae. thanks for commenting!

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aireyelle June 24 2012, 01:15:56 UTC

um, ok...i love you? lol this comment so made my day right now. Wow, i never thought of Kibum as sinister...manipulative, but not sinister lol. and sadly, i agree taekey are the most developed characters. i feel like the other three are 'Mary Sues' but i shall fix that! and as for the 'snatching-pulling' thing, thank you for clarifying. i wasnt much paying attention and started to just want this chapter to be OVER so i didnt reread or go over anything after that last period lol

I appreciate the comment and criticism!