This was absolutely beautiful! You're great with imagery, which is my weakness, you show us clearly in our mind's eye the little details that bring your words alive.
How incredibly creative to take your mother's words that far, to think of all the implications of the battle. I've heard that teaching but it never led me to such thoughts, perhaps it should have though.
Aww, *blush* you are too kind. Imagery is usually my goal in poems, so I'm really glad that you could see the little details.
I was brought up with a lot of religious education, and now that I'm able to think for myself those questions I had as a kid have interesting new depths ...
I once asked my pastor (when I was like ... maybe 7 or so) if God wants us to love Satan, since he wants us to love everyone. He didn't know what to tell me.
Hi there, I am doing a catch up edit to help out. This is very thought provoking. I know I commented on it when it went up... I keep wondering who is portrayed by the statue... Yahweh? Lucifer?
Holy war is also a multi-level phrase - a war that is waged by the holy (but if there are demons fighting, how can that war be holy?); the “holy war” that is a war waged by fanatics with shit for brains.
The child sees “ethereal corpses.” (Nice phrase, that!) What does the mother see? A real battle? Corpses? Or the eternal battle between good and evil?
Very thought provoking. The lines:
Above us, below us, between us, about us.” remind me of the format of the lorica - a Celtic prayer.
I have no recommendations for change... it is very well done as it stands!
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Great details. And I'm always impressed by someone who does the vertical rhythm thing so well.
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How incredibly creative to take your mother's words that far, to think of all the implications of the battle. I've heard that teaching but it never led me to such thoughts, perhaps it should have though.
Please keep sharing your creative spirit!:)
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I was brought up with a lot of religious education, and now that I'm able to think for myself those questions I had as a kid have interesting new depths ...
I once asked my pastor (when I was like ... maybe 7 or so) if God wants us to love Satan, since he wants us to love everyone. He didn't know what to tell me.
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Holy war is also a multi-level phrase - a war that is waged by the holy (but if there are demons fighting, how can that war be holy?); the “holy war” that is a war waged by fanatics with shit for brains.
The child sees “ethereal corpses.” (Nice phrase, that!) What does the mother see? A real battle? Corpses? Or the eternal battle between good and evil?
Very thought provoking. The lines:
Above us,
below us,
between us,
about us.”
remind me of the format of the lorica - a Celtic prayer.
I have no recommendations for change... it is very well done as it stands!
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