it comes unannounced 2/2
Title: it comes unannounced
Author: ajin
Pairing: Onew/Taemin
Rating: NC-17 (not too graphic)
Genre: AU, Romance
Word Count: 5,479
Summary: Taemin thinks too much. Jinki may think too little. Their worlds not-so-coincidently collide.
( ...rolling on the wet grass... )
Author: ajin
Pairing: Onew/Taemin
Rating: NC-17 (not too graphic)
Genre: AU, Romance
Word Count: 5,479
Summary: Taemin thinks too much. Jinki may think too little. Their worlds not-so-coincidently collide.
( ...rolling on the wet grass... )
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I particularly loved this part, it just made me melt!
"“I’ve missed you”, Jinki utters softly. Hugging him from behind out of sudden. Whispering straight into his ear, head propped on his shoulder.
“Don’t go disappearing on me like this.”
He squeezes Jinki’s interlaced fingers.
“I promise I won’t. Really”, he says with fake confidence, trying to persuade mostly himself.
“Just don’t.”
“I said I won’t.”"
This fic was beautiful and I was sad to see it end! I hope to see more work from you =D
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I had quite big problems writing the end so I'm really happy it worked for you^^
I wouldn't count on it in the near future but who knows...?
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so many things i wanna say ;__; omg, the fog and the walls, tae's insecurity, the back hugging scene (i died there, okay.), fjskdflk, Just a forgotten moment in time. There go the fireworks.
IDEK.
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Thank you :D
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OMG THIS WAS BEYOND BEAUTIFUL!! YOU'RE A GENIUS, YOU REALLY ARE.
I LOVE SO MANY THINGS ABOUT THIS FIC, I'M GOING TO CRY AGAIN BECAUSE IT ENDED TT-TT
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BUT THIS FIC HAS SOMETHING THE OTHER FICS DON'T - YOU WROTE IT ♥
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Awwwwwwww, you precious cookie, you ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
*blinks* k, I'll be retreating to bed. Considering the time you should too because beauty sleep>shinee o.o
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I will come back to make a decent comment (because the world knows you deserve more than this for this beautiful story) but I just gotta say:
marry me I love you. /worships
/also asking for permission to make a spammy (flailing!gifs) comment <3
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I would marry you but I'm already married to...at least 3 people o-o and no worshiping because it's definitely not THAT good.
Spam away! I love such comment XD
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The whole story has a tone of poetry to it, which adds this beautiful deep/ awe inspiring atmosphere. It feels as if you took special care choosing all the right words; what's said and what's left unspoken. Somehow, it also feels as if there is some personal experience written into it, but maybe that's just me relating to the story. ;)
I really like the short sentences describing moments, like:
Wind almost knocked out of him. Jinki’s everywhere. Pushing him back and himself forward. Crushing them together. Making their pulses mingle. Kissing him hard. Being like a storm. Just like that violent storm. Swiping him off his feet. Shredding his own silent self. It makes him moan, the sheer realisation that Jinki went crazy because of him.
It seems as if translates the situations in a more real way. also this paragraph was just amazing :Q__ The only downside, I think, is that in the beginning of the second part their relationship ( ... )
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I'm glad you liked that. It seems people either think it works or are confused XD
I wrote it as a whole, not in 2 parts so I guess the beginning of this part happened like a week after the 1st part ended? I agree though. It can seem a bit rushed but that's how I am myself. If I start liking someone from the very beginning, it goes express speed. I wanted to add a few things more but in the end decided it would probably ruin everything :/
Well, he was just acting on his emotions because he had no guts...GOD I WAS WORRIED IT WOULD BE TOTALLY EMOTIONLESS. AND THAT GIF I LOVE *O*
Jinki has the unfortunate tendency to be as emo as Taemin in this fic ;;
I don't even want to imagine cause I know what I would do *coughs*
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"I sense trickery" is possibly the best line ever. The story is so touching... *sigh*
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Thank you *O*
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