Comments | aleana15: Fic for Atlantean_three's Three Sin Challenge

aleana15

Fic for Atlantean_three's Three Sin Challenge

Aug 16, 2006 14:46

It was meant to have been a simple ‘say-hi-to-the-natives’, ‘eat-some-terrible-food’ and ‘find-Sheppard-a-new-girlfriend-and-possibly-trade’ mission. Huh, like that ever happens these days.

Only for once I can’t be blamed for cocking it up. No, for once that falls firmly in the court of The Pegasus Galaxy’s very own Braveheart.

He’s still ( Read more... )

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aleana15 August 16 2006, 20:24:00 UTC

Thanks for that - and corrected. Although I think I meant psychic!lol I've gone though it again so hopefully *fingers crossed* there aren't any more errors.

Glad you like the story :D

batagur August 17 2006, 01:34:47 UTC

This was beautiful! Thank you for sharing it. :)

aleana15 August 20 2006, 18:22:03 UTC

Thank-you! Glad you enjoyed it :D

wliberation August 19 2006, 21:39:06 UTC

Aaww, that was very lovely. Thank you! I liked the first-person pov, and the tone of voice you set was fantastic. It all worked very well. I also liked how you got my prompts in. Rodney not liking how Carson is angry, and him being envious of the girl for making Carson smile... *grin* That was great, but what was even more great was the bit about Rodney being irritated when people looked at him sympathetically. It was a brief moment but it told a much bigger story than a single paragraph leads on.

I'm beginning to think I imagined that kiss. It's certainly not in the mission report.

This was delicious. I love how he's not sure if it really happened because there's no one else to state the fact. That was a lovely glimpse of "common realism" and certainly sends my imagination flying as to what comes after this story.

Once again, thank you very much for writing this! I enjoyed it a lot.

aleana15 August 20 2006, 18:28:47 UTC

*blushes* I'm so glad you liked it. It was certainly a challenge to write from Rodney's POV, so I'm now bouncing that someone's said it's okay!

I was a bit worried that it wasn't clear where the sins come into it - difficult to make sure they're themes but don't take over the story. And I just couldn't get this scene of Rodney and Carson hiding in a cave with a little girl. It's weird how you get a scene that you just have to write - so you have to build the whole story around one scene effectively!

Thanks very much for the brill prompt and I'm glad I've given you something for your imagination to chew on :p

Aleana

littlepestacio October 2 2006, 20:29:08 UTC

It´s very good. I love it.