Ficlet: Catch

[aletes_muse]

Title: Catch
Author: Ebonie Rose/ aletes_muse
Rating: PG-13?
Genre: Fluff! I managed fluff, people! *dances happily*
Challenge: enchanted_jae monthly drabble challenge: #16, lame pick up lines.
Summary: "God damn it, Potter!" Malfoy cried. "I am trying to come on to you!"
Author's Notes: So I’m completely insane and decided one bad pick up line wasn’t enough. Just so you

Comments

[hergunfight]

Faffing around, mosty definately a good expression to throw in there. I so dislike blatant Americanisms.

Very cute story :-D Ron is a wanker.

[aletes_muse]

Thank you! The strange thing is I don't mind Ron but somehow I can't seem to write him all that nicely, most of the time.

I'm British, myself, so whenever people point out Americanisms in my writing I'm sitting there going, "What? I'm British people this is how we talk!" Well, I do anyway :)

Thanks for reading and I'm glad you liked it :).

[hergunfight]

I adore Ron but that doesn't take away the fact that hes an insensitive wanker. Bless him.

I'm a Londoner, and well you can't help adding some American slang here and there because we're so exposed to it haha. As long as I never read that Harry's added "Rad" to his vocabulary I'll live with it.

You're welcome. :-)

[aletes_muse]

Oh good God, no. I would cringe to read Harry turning around and saying, "Like, totally rad, dude." Cringe, laugh and then run ... far away.

Not a Londoner myself, (heh, Northern Ireander) but we get our fair share of exposure to American stuff. From T.V. mostly :D.

Ron = insensitive wanker is only too true. I can just imagine him sticking his foot in it at a funeral. I think there's a lyric from a Bare Naked Ladies song that perfectly explains him, "I'm the kind of guy that laughs at a funeral." Or, then again, maybe that's just my perception of him :D

[drusillas_rain]

hee ^_^ cute!

[graylor]

Excellent. Also, like, totally rad, dude. ;) Seriously, I like "faffing around": realism in fanfic dialogue, yay!

[aletes_muse]

Totally rad :D. I try to be as realistic as possible! *grins*

[lackofmendacity]

Ahahaha, how cute! :D Poor Draco, having to deal with oblivious!Harry. *g*

Oh, please tell me what Draco's pick up lines were going to be... I've never heard them before. *wibbles*

That was a really funny read, so thank you for sharing! *hugs*

[aletes_muse]

The Tennessee pick up line is: "Are you from Tennessee? 'Cause you're the only ten I see!"

... It sort of fit with the whole 'lame pick up lines' criteria, eh?

The other one about seeing something swell was one I picked up from a friend of mine who asked me it one day. Made me laugh my arse off. It's basically referring to a certain part of Draco's anatomy in this fic *throws back head and laughs*

I'm glad you liked it! *hugs back* And you're right ... poor Draco. But oblivious!Harry is just too much fun to pass up the chance to write.

[lackofmendacity]

Heheh, your two lame lines are great! :D And awww... your friend tried to pick you up. *g*

[aletes_muse]

Yeah. Most. Embarrassing. Moment. Ever. When I had to say I wasn't interested :D

[miniluv68]

I have to say, I didn't really get the Tennessee one, I sat there puzzling for awhile. *g* The swelling one was a bit more obvious to me. Draco and his awesome pick-up lines... quite hilarious.

[aletes_muse]

Thank you! The Tennessee pick up line is one I found trawling the 'Net looking for clues - because I do research for my fics lol :D. That, and I know very few really bad pick up lines. :D.

The swelling one came from a personal experience :D.